What is WRONG with this RFP?

Here is a real-life RFP for Financial Services with suggestions for improvement. 

Identifying details have been disguised.

Take me there !
April 29, 2021
· An RFP is a Request for Proposals seeking responses from Financial Service Providers qualified to meet your needs ·
April 28, 2021
The “four financial pillars” in Canada were consolidated in 1992 but still provide a useful framework when analyzing our requirements.
Investment Policy Statement (IPS)
April 28, 2021
· An IPS is an Investment Policy Statement which summarizes the client's financial requirements ·